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4/5/11

writing exercise

Eddie buckled Sam into her stroller and stretched a floppy sunhat over her head. “Hat,” he said.

Sam pulled the bonnet off. “No hat,” she said.

Eddie knelt to pick it up. He tied the straps snug under Sam’s chin. “On,” he said.

Sam reached up, yanked a little harder, and removed the hat again. “Off,” she said. This game was fun!

3 comments:

Diane Adams said...

Love this! I think you have the start of a children's book here!!

Edie Hemingway said...

There's nothing like the economy of words in dialogue, and you certainly captured Sam's personality, Christy!

David LaRochelle said...

I love the minimal dialogue! Very, very believable! I already feel sympathy for poor Eddie!