Ten writers for children. All with something to say.

2/16/09

hold your nose

This Is Just To Say

I’m a cretin
all thumbs
and this din
only mocks

such kitsch
is obviously
raving
and reckless

Forgive me
for an ambitious
conceit
uncontrolled



by Christy Hale

12 comments:

Edie Hemingway said...

Christy,

Another fun rendition of "This is just to say..." and you sent me to the dictionary to look up kitsch! I admire your economy of words.

Lauren said...

Hmmm... I am wondering what voice you speak with Christy. I have studio voices that sound similar!
Great words and consonants-- very cutting.

Stephanie said...

This passes my poetry test of "It must be a good poem because I have to go look up words and think about them".

Christy said...

Okay everyone, I must seem really opaque. Compare the last word of every line with WCW's poem and you'll see what mischief I was up to. Once I got started I couldn't help myself.

David LaRochelle said...

Ahhh! Your cleverness went over my head, Christy! Thanks for the clue, and your crafty take on this assignment!

Lauren said...

Very clever!

john said...

Christy, how ambitious. What an interesting take on the assignment. The bar has been raised for the rest of us.

Stephanie said...

Ok, now I'm feeling really dumb because I don't get it...

Christy said...

What I did was really lame. I just rhymed every line of my poem with WCW's poem (eaten/cretin, plums/thumbs, in/din, box/mocks) I tried to match each line in syllable count and stress too, all while retaining some semblance of meaning. This is definitely not WCW's purpose, but just some silly hurdles I decided to jump over.

Stephanie said...

Oh cool! You were a very clever girl:)

betsy woods said...

Ahhhh! This is the best potato assignment yet. I thought I liked you Christy; now, I know I love you. (maybe one day we will all meet)

Christy said...

You are all too kind.